Equine Vampiris- Chapter 3The bittersweet taste lingered in her mouth as she dropped her prey, the barely conscious mass collapsing onto the dusty path below. With every fading heartbeat, the prey let a little more of red fluid flow from the open wound in their neck. A scowl crossed her lips at the thought of the fluid that sustained her being wasted. With a growl, she started walking back to her nest, the first warm slivers of sunlight beginning to break over the surrounding hills. She could feel herself getting weaker, the sunlight draining away the little strength she got from her feed. But she could still taste the blood around her mouth and savoured the flavour.
Vision: It's starting to look as if Twilight isn't especially interested in curing herself of her case of being a horrifying abomination. Also, I'd be kinda worried about Colgate in case this is contagious or something.
Originality: It's good to see certain elements of the "Always Connected" story line in this one; even if it isn't connected to that story, it's similar enough that we know what to expect.
Technique: Showing us what Twilight is thinking during the chapter helps us see that she's starting to turn into something pretty much monstrous and starting to not question it.
Impact: I really am kind of worried about Twilight right about now. She might not want to solve this after all.